Friday 30 November 2018
100 word challenge
On a sunny day some kids went to the forest. they found a secret cave behind some vines they got there gear out ready to explore it. they started to hear a faint sound.
It got louder and louder until it was easy to tell it was music. They then decided to open the door ahhhhhhhh there was a bunch of unicorns dancing with glowsuits and glowhorns.
They walked into the party and looked around it was uni world
The thing that really caught their eyes was a giant continuis rainbow swirl going into a giant hole that echoes echoesssssssss.
This was my part 1 of this story i'm working on a part 2. but comment what other story ideas you want me to work off. thanks for reading by Giorgio.
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hi Giogro. i`m Luka i like your post but you could format it better.
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ReplyDeleteHello Giorgio I'm Corey in Kaingaroa school in the far north.
ReplyDeleteI love the start next time maybe preview it.
Thanks!
hi Giorgio Kauri here from kaingaroa school i like your 100 word challenge yo just need to preview it.
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ReplyDeletehi Giogro
ReplyDeletethis is really cool
maybe you could make it smaller so it doesn't go off the page
did you like making this?
Kia Ora Giorgio,
ReplyDeleteIm Lara from kaingaroa school and I'm a year 6.
I like your 100 word challenge
Maybe next time you could click preview before posting so you can make sure that it dosent overlap.
When did you start your 100 word challenge ?
Hi Giorgio,my name is kaylee you need to fix your story by having it not off the side.
ReplyDeleteHi Giorgio. I'm a year 6 from Kaingaroa school. I like your story because it has level 3 words. i think you should fix the words that are overlaping eachother because I couldn't read the full story. But other than that it is awesome.
ReplyDeleteHi Giogro nice story just maybe change your format or make it smaller
ReplyDeleteHi Giorgio, I'm Charlie from kaingaroa school and I like your story and the creativity with it. This sounds like a story I might write about,my favourite part was when they saw the party. Next time though you should preview it first to see if its going off the screen. I hope to see you on my blog.
ReplyDeleteHi Giogro Jaspa here you have a nice story but i can't realy read it but it's still awsome!
ReplyDeletehi im brazil8i like your story it inprovedbye
ReplyDeleteHi Giorgio. My name is Eva, I am a year 6 at Kaingaroa school. I love your story. I think you need to fix the words that have gone over the side of your blog.
ReplyDeleteHi Giorgio i like your story and full stops but maybe you car change your format
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Marko i like your 100 word challenge but you could make it smaller and is it a really 100 word challenge??? but i relay like it...
ReplyDeletehi i'm Asher i can't see your story because it is to wide,ask your teacher to help you make it smaller if she does not know a manaiakalani teacher.
ReplyDeleteHi i'm billy ray from Kaingaroa school your 100 word challenge is awesome maybe change the size bye.
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